Who Wants a Free Blog Post Critique? (Value $170)

by Paul Wolfe on July 21, 2011

Here’s the story so far, a couple of weeks ago I posted this:

Why Newbie Bloggers Should Monetize Their Blogs Now

And in that post I referred to the upcoming Services that are going live on One Spoon later in the year.  One of those services is a Writing Consultation:

 

As a prelude to that going live – and as an exercise that I hope you’ll all find really interesting – I’m giving away three blog post critiques (with qualifications).  Actually, there’s only two up for grabs, as the first one has already gone.

Winner #1 – Adarsh Thampy

Adarsh is a blogger who I’ve seen around the old Interwebz.  He guest posted over at my buddy Steve’s Scott site recently:

How To Become a Better Sales Person

Last week he emailed me and asked me if I was interested in a guest post.  I emailed him back and told him that for sure I would take a look at his post, but that I have a clear goal of what I’m publishing at One Spoon and there was a good chance that his post wouldn’t fit that vision.

And in fact, that’s what happened.  Adarsh’s post was about Freelance Writing – and though I talk about writing here on One Spoon as you probably know, freelance writing isn’t a topic that I plan to cover in much depth.  If at all.

But I like Adarsh’s energy.  And I like the way he’s getting around and trying to build an online business.  And I didn’t just want to flat out reject his post.

So I made him an offer:

To use his post as a demonstration of the kind of things I’ll be doing with my upcoming blog critique service.  So he gets a critique of that guest post for free – along with suggested exercises he can practice to make his writing better.   The quid pro quo is I publish the majority of that openly here on One Spoon, so other people can see it and learn from it.  (And yep, maybe decide that they want the full-on consult when it goes live!).

And he’ll get the same amount of link love as if I did publish a guest post.  (Actually he gets more, because I’m mentioning him here too – you can find Adarsh at http://salesmaximus.com/).

So at some stage next week I’ll publish that critique.  I was talking this over with one of my mastermind buddies – he suggested that I put it out there as a ‘competition’ and do a couple of other free critiques.

Between us we hammered out some eligibility rules for the remaining two ‘free’ critiques.

How To Win A Free Blog Post Critique (Value approx  $170)

To be eligible to win a free blog post critique you need to fill the following conditions:

  • 1)   Post a comment saying you’d like to be considered – DON’T post a link to your blog in your comment though!
  • 2)   Tweet today’s post out – maybe add something like: “I’ve entered the competition – have you?” to the front of the tweet
  • 3)   Agree that I can publish your blog post here on One Spoon – as well as my suggested amendments.  As well as publishing two versions of the post (yours and mine), I’ll comment on what I’ve done, introduce you at the top of the post with a link, and I’ll email you the suggested exercises to incorporate into your writing practice.
  • 4)   I’d prefer ‘newbie’ and up-and-coming bloggers rather than established bloggers.  (On the grounds that established bloggers already have an audience and if they want a critique they should be able to monetize their blog – if they’re not already  – and actually pay for the proper service!).  As a rough guideline if your Alexa rank is above 150,000 I probably won’t consider you.  (Note: probably, not definitely.  I’m willing to consider exceptions – use the contact form and hit me up with an email)
  • 5)   I have no idea what the take up rate on this will be.  So if there are enough entries to pick winners from, I’ll get my kids to choose one each from a random list of names.  (Note: my youngest son – Max – will almost certainly choose a woman!)  That way I can’t be accused of any kind of favouritism or anything like that!
  • 6)   I don’t mind posts that are already published being submitted as entries – but you will NOT be free to publish the edited post anywhere but here.
  • 7)  If you’re on my Newsletter/Subscriber List you automatically get your entry doubled so you’ve got twice the chance of winning!

And I think that’s it.  If I think of anything else, I’ll edit it in.

Use The Comments Form and Join The Competition

So post a comment.  Send a tweet.  Join the competition.  If you’re not a subscriber yet, just tick the appropriate checkbox in the comment form and you’ll be added to the list and your entry will count double!

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Adarsh Thampy July 21, 2011 at 11:15 am

Hey Paul…. Thanks.

Just wanted to let you know that I got critiqued by the guys at market samurai as well!!!

http://www.noblesamurai.com/blog/noble-samurai-training/practical-ideas-to-boost-conversion-2-case-studies-2640/

The second case study is mine. Although they got my main business model wrong, it was a great piece of critique
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Paul Wolfe July 21, 2011 at 1:41 pm

Hey Adarsh

No worries – I’d like to publicly state here that admire your cojones for agreeing to have your post critiqued in public. A lot of people don’t have the balls for it.

I decided that I need to walk the walk too….so at some stage later in the year I’m gonna get someone to publically critique one of my posts – the guy I have in mind is a multiple New York Times bestselling author. So no doubt I’ll get eviscerated on my own blog!

And although I’m kind of nervous about it – I’m also looking forward to it – how else can you learn???

Paul

PS I’ll publish the critique either Monday or Thursday next week.
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Trisha Cupra July 21, 2011 at 11:42 am

I hope your kids like owls… :)

Is there a hashtag you need us to use in our tweets so you can track them?
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Paul Wolfe July 21, 2011 at 1:39 pm

Hey Trish

No hashtags necessary! If you press the appropriate Tweet button to the left I’ll be able to track you!

My eldest loves owls – because he thinks he is Harry Potter, and he’d love to have a Hedwig of his own. My youngest likes Total Wipeout and Splatalot…so not so much….

Paul
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Trisha Cupra July 22, 2011 at 1:11 am

I have my tweets automatically posted on Facebook, too, so maybe that will help. :)
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Sheila Atwood July 21, 2011 at 1:51 pm

Paul,

This really is a great offer. I will be sure to spread the word around.

Paul Wolfe July 21, 2011 at 3:43 pm

Hey Sheila

Thank you – and you already have! So for which, thank you again!
I hope this proves beneficial to the winners – but also to the readers.

Paul
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Joe July 21, 2011 at 3:23 pm

Please consider me. No one is reading my blog. I agree to all your terms and conditions staed above.

Paul Wolfe July 22, 2011 at 8:39 pm

Joe

You’re entered – but note the critique is about a blog post and your writing style. It’s not a critique of your blog and what’s right with it and what’s wrong with it.

Make sense?

paul
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Jk Allen July 21, 2011 at 3:27 pm

Hey Paul!

I’d like to just say that I think this service that your offering for free, for this current promotion is great.

I can’t recall who I was telling this too…but I was having a convo with someone and you came up as being an excellent writer; with superb technical writing skills. So I couldn’t think of a better person to offer this type of service.

Good luck!
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Paul Wolfe July 21, 2011 at 3:46 pm

Hey JK

Apologies for the gratuitous riffing about Beyonce’s ass that Benny and I engaged in on your blog!

Thanks for the comments – it’s nice to have people say nice things about my writing, but important to stay grounded and focused and know that there’s always another peak to climb…

As I commented above in replying to Adarsh I plan to repeat this exercise later in the year where it’s one of MY pieces of writing that gets critiqued for everyone to see!

Have a great day man, as always it’s a pleasure having you stop by.

Paul
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Stan Faryna July 21, 2011 at 3:37 pm

My tweet was not standard issue. [grin]
But you know by now, I’m funny that way. Anyway, I’m in.
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Paul Wolfe July 21, 2011 at 4:03 pm

Hey Stan

My eldest just came home from school and I told him about the competition. When I told him he was picking one of the winners he said – and I quote – Can I set up an Amazon Wish List and choose the person who buys me the best lego?

Between choking on laughter I didn’t know whether to commend him for his entrepreneurial spirit or send him to his bedroom in disgrace!

You are indeed in!

Paul
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Eugene July 21, 2011 at 3:41 pm

I would totally take you up on this offer (and I wouldn’t consider myself established quite yet). But I feel like you have gone out of your way to help me enough already, and someone else deserves a share of your knowledge :) . This is quite an offer, whoever wins will be lucky to have your input.
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Paul Wolfe July 22, 2011 at 8:41 pm

Hey Eugene

You’re getting there bro’ – and you write pretty well, and seem pretty comfortable in your skin. For sure, there are things you can do to get better…as we all can…but you’re disqualified from entering because your Alexa Rank is too high!

Thanks for stopping by – how’s things going in the ‘escape from cubicle’ world?

Paul
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Toni Dockter July 21, 2011 at 3:45 pm

Hi Paul:

How very gallant of you! This is a generous offer. And so needed. As someone who works in Corporate America (Silicon Valley) I am astounded by the lousy writing I see on a daily basis.

I have no idea what an Alexa rank rank is (although I know I should.) I am not a newbie (two-year-old blog). But I am a nobody (blogsite wise).

However, DON’T pick me. Why not? Because I am confident I write well. I doubt you’d find anything to edit in my latest blog post: “The Power of Perseverance – A Swimmingly Good Story.”

Someone else can use your expertise more than me. I appreciate you valuing the English language and wanting to do it proud. Write on!

P.S. Read this in a sing-songy voice: Da da da DA! That is I (correct grammar even though it sounds dreadful) my own horn. Which could also be construed as dreadful. Your son might enjoy an off-shoot of my blog site: PercyVeerance.com

P.P.S. If there are any goofs in this post, the caffeine has not kicked in yet!
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Paul Wolfe July 22, 2011 at 8:46 pm

Hey Toni

Thanks for leaving a comment and welcome to One Spoon.

There’s a lot of lousy writing on the blogosphere too – and lots of lousy writing advice as well. Hopefully this series of critiques will give people some concrete ideas of how they can improve their own writing – and some concrete ideas of how to put those ideas into practice.

That’s the goal of these free critiques.

Time will tell if I’m successful or whether I fall over and look foolish!

Paul
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Gretchen July 21, 2011 at 3:55 pm

I’d like to enter your free blog post critique contest. My blog is about workout DVDs, but I’m also an aspiring writer.

Paul Wolfe July 22, 2011 at 8:47 pm

Hey Gretchen

Good writing is good writing irrespective of the topic. Welcome to the competition.

Paul
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Melanie Kissell from SoloMompreneur July 21, 2011 at 5:03 pm

Magnificent idea and offer, Paul — count on me to help promote it. :)

Paul Wolfe July 22, 2011 at 8:47 pm

Hey Melanie

Thanks for your comment and support. Glad you like it!

Paul
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Krista Stryker July 21, 2011 at 7:04 pm

Awesome idea, Paul – I’m in! And I’m a subscriber :)
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Paul Wolfe July 22, 2011 at 8:48 pm

Hey Krista

I know you;re a subscriber (I have a good memory for names and dates). Seen you around the blogosphere a lot recently…Copyblogger….Sales Lion…and of course here. Way to go…

Paul
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Kathy Sprinkle July 21, 2011 at 9:35 pm

I would love to be considered… I have no idea what an Alexa rank is (although I will go to find out immediately!) so I figure I fit your criteria!

Thanks for the opportunity!
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Paul Wolfe July 22, 2011 at 8:49 pm

Kathy

Don’t worry what an Alexa Rank is (your is around 2.4 million though). It’s a number that sometimes bloggers use as a rough guide to their progress.

You’re entered into the competition!

Paul
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Flloyd Kennedy July 22, 2011 at 2:09 am

What a terrific offer! Boy I would love to be critiqued. I write from the heart, about stuff that matters to me, on the principle that I hope others are interested in the same stuff. It’s a pretty narrow group at the moment, and I’d dearly love to spread the word further. I look forward to reading your critiques, whether mine is one or not. Great call.

Paul Wolfe July 22, 2011 at 8:51 pm

Hey Flloyd

Consider yourself in with a chance….

Paul
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Sue from BuyPLRToday July 22, 2011 at 12:00 pm

This is a great offer and I would love to have a critique done. My blog does not get much conversation and was basically started as a way to get links to my PLR store. I’m all in for learning how to improve this.
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Paul Wolfe July 22, 2011 at 8:52 pm

Hey Sue

Well you’re entered into the competition -please note though that it’s a critique of an individual blog post that will help you isolate some areas in your writing that can be improved.

So it’s not so much about getting more traffic or conversation going on your blog.

Paul
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Calli from Wedding Favors July 22, 2011 at 2:01 pm

Hi Paul,

The writing consultation sounds interesting. I’m looking forward for the edited article of Adarsh. I think this is still a good marketing step for Adarsh. Not many bloggers are great in writing so I guess this will give more publicity to him rather than shame. :)

Adarsh Thampy July 22, 2011 at 3:32 pm

More than popularity, I am looking for ways to improve my writing. being a non native writer, I did have challenges coming this far.

I am always looking to improve myself. So a critique from Paul would definitely do me the world of good in terms of writing as well as traffic.
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Paul Wolfe July 22, 2011 at 8:54 pm

@Calli

When I emailed Adarsh with my offer I fully expected him to say no – because it takes balls to have your work critiqued in public. So kudos to Adarsh for agreeing so readily.

@Adarsh

I really like the decisiveness you’ve displayed in agreeing to the writing critique. I’m a great believer that if you write better you WILL attract more traffic….but the critique will focus only on the writing.
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Calli from Wedding Favors July 26, 2011 at 4:40 am

Hi Adarsh,

Quality content is very important nowadays especially for Google. So I think you made the right decision to take Paul’s offer. I am not good at writing as well and I’m looking forward to learn from Paul’s critique for your article. :)

Paul Wolfe July 26, 2011 at 7:12 am

Calli

Quality content isn’t just important – it’s the price of entry. (Great line – not mine, Corbett Barr of Think Traffic came up with that one).
And the important thing is that every one of us can get better at writing – irrespective of our current level. All it takes is an openness to learn, and finding the right tools that can help us move forward.

Paul

Marina Brito from Defeat The Cousin July 22, 2011 at 2:59 pm

Well, why not? :O

I’m paralyzed of getting my writing critiqued! But it could push me to the next level so tell the Amazon Wizard and Sir Splatalot that I’d be happy to contribute to their Lego collection. ;)
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Sally July 22, 2011 at 5:45 pm

Hi,

First off: my Alexa ranking is above 150,000. However, I am a dedicated blogger/writer. I aim to offer the best content in my niche for my readers.
Secondly, I’m not a technical blogger as I’ve learned everything on my own (with the help of tentblogger.com, dragonblogger.com and a few other awesome technical bloggers.

Having said the above, I would very much like to have a review of a post, as I want to make sure I am up to par. I think it is important to have a critique from ‘people in the know’ from time to time. This is a great offer, and I’m hoping I will be considered. Thank you.
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Paul Wolfe July 22, 2011 at 8:59 pm

Hi Sally

Your Alexa Rank is actually ‘below’ 150,000 – so you qualify on that basis! (it’s only a rough guide anyway). You’re officially entered…winners will be published sometime next week.

Paul

One tip, you might want to change the ‘header graphic’ on your blog. You’re using what looks like the 2010 Theme (which is a cool free theme, I used it here before I bought Thesis) – but the standard header graphics are distinctive to anyone who knows anything about 2010. Or is it updated and called the 2011 theme now?

Paul Wolfe July 22, 2011 at 8:55 pm

Hola Marina!

They’ll be delighted to hear that! (Just kidding).

But I’ve decided to disqualify you on the grounds that your in my Mastermind Group! (Emailed you though!)

Paulxx
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Marina Brito from Defeat The Cousin July 22, 2011 at 10:43 pm

Oh, well.

More chances for the brave souls who are putting their names in the hat. :)

mxx
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Trisha Cupra July 23, 2011 at 7:53 am

On those grounds I need to bail out, too.

Sally July 22, 2011 at 9:08 pm

Thank you for entering me in the contest, Paul. I chose the theme because I liked the look of it. I did upload the newer version of it recently. I’ll look into it at some point, but for now I think I’ll stick with what I have. I’m just ready to stay busy writing. Thanks you, Sally

Paul Wolfe July 22, 2011 at 9:18 pm

Sally

That’s fine – given the choice between doing graphics or writing, I’d take writing every day of the week!

paul
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Stuart July 23, 2011 at 8:43 am

Paul, two things:

1) If you wish to consider Unlock The Door for a blog post critique, I’d be happy to let you do so. I’m gonna tweet this post anyway because it’s what I do ;-)

2) I think you’re doing an amazing service with this project. I believe your greatest strength is your writing, and the more you can use that for the power of good, the better the world will be.

Best of luck :-)
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Paul Wolfe July 23, 2011 at 6:08 pm

Stuart I understand the sentiments…and like them too.

I’d like to believe I was the Luke Skywalker of the writing world, bringing the power of the Force to hordes of acolyte bloggers and content marketers! Of course, the reality is far more mundane than that.

Hopefully this series of three critiques will help three (pretty randomly chosen) people specifically, and perhaps more indirectly (those who read and learn from teh critique posts themselves). Hopefully Adarsh and the two others will one day remember this, and pay it forward. Now THAT’S a concept I believe in….the whole Pay It Forward concept is a virus waiting for the right trigger to explode. (Flawed but deeply interesting film too).

Consider yourself entered into the competition! And thanks for stopping by.

Paul

Patricia Anne McGoldrick July 23, 2011 at 4:49 pm

Hello Paul,
Received a tweet from Sheila Atwood, a mentor for this beginner.

Thought I would submit this post for critique at http://pm27.wordpress.com/2011/07/20/summer-challenges/.
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Paul Wolfe July 23, 2011 at 6:08 pm

Hey Patricia

Thanks for entering – and I’ll have to thank Sheila too! She’s been spreading the word!

paul

Adrienne July 25, 2011 at 7:53 pm

Wow, would love to see who these brave souls will be Paul. I’m certainly not going to put mine in the hat because I just write for the love of it and to share what I learn with my readers. Trust me, you would hack it to pieces. But I can see where this would be very important for those really trying to get very targeted visitors to their blog for money making ventures. You are really offering a great service here and I can’t wait to read more.

Appreciate you sharing and you know I’ll be back soon.

Adrienne
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Paul Wolfe July 26, 2011 at 6:47 am

Hey Adrienne

There’s two things you should know – firstly when it comes to the ‘school of critiquing’ I’m not the kind of guy who stomps all over your work and tells you it’s crap. Second – this relates to something I’ve seen around the internnet in the last week or so too, so it’s timely – I will tailor the critiques to the ‘student’s’ current ability level. So that way I’ll be giving them ideas of how to get better that are just beyond their current level – that way they’ll actually be able to visualize themselves being able to do the tasks I suggest.

So although none of us – ME INCLUDED! – likes to be critiqued, and are protective of our writing, I’m going to do is as ‘safely’ as possible. (Note ‘safely’ doesn’t equate to sanitizing my critiques.)

Paul

Adrienne July 26, 2011 at 3:09 pm

I have no doubt you’ll be gentle and honest at the same time. For those who really are eager to improve their blogs and content, I believe this is the perfect solution. :-)
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Sonia July 26, 2011 at 11:10 pm

I would love to have an opportunity to be apart of this. Thanks for the consideration and I hope I win! Either way, thanks anyway. Tweeted as well!
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Betsy Cross August 26, 2011 at 10:23 am

Hey Paul!
Funny, I started writing to get a message out and then found out that if writing is all you have you’d better get educated about it!
I’m in because I’m competitive, I love getting scared, and I have no idea what an Alexa rank (score?) is.
The hard part is remembering what I have to do to enter. I’m notorious for NOT following directions correctly!
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John Davies from Types of Dogs September 1, 2011 at 12:07 am

I would love to have an opportunity to be apart of this. Thanks for the consideration and I hope I win! Either way, thanks anyway. Tweeted as well!

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